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Post by Tomahawk on Nov 28, 2004 8:22:38 GMT
I've gone ahead and made a few subtle changes into the opening posts which needed edited...
I changed the titles from "needs editing" to "edited" for the ones I've worked on.
In some cases they're still a bit "clunky", imho, but that's largely because we were speaking with "quotation marks" instead of saying, says Tomahawk.
To try and fix this, I inserted the names where necessary, and put the names in Bold so readers could keep track of who's who!
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Post by Silverback on Nov 28, 2004 8:31:33 GMT
Thanks Tomahawk. One other thing I will be editing is changing all the dialogue so that it can be read as if from a 'third-person' perspective.
A style which I think is easier to read and generally accepted as the 'norm' where PbP forums are concerned!
SB
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Post by Tomahawk on Nov 28, 2004 8:36:43 GMT
yeah, but whoever said we're the "norm"?!
j/k
by third person perspective, I take it you mean:
Tomahawk closes the door, turns, and runs into the wall *smack*
as opposed to:
I close the door, turn, and run face-first into the wall...
yes? no?
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Post by Silverback on Nov 28, 2004 8:47:11 GMT
by third person perspective, I take it you mean: Tomahawk closes the door, turns, and runs into the wall *smack* as opposed to: I close the door, turn, and run face-first into the wall... Oops - too sleepy when I posted. I meant past tense third-person! Tomahawk closed the door, it's hinges squeaked quietly as they swung shut, turning Tomahawk hadn't paid attention to the closed-in coridor behind him and ran *smack* into the wall!Is this better? |
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Post by Tomahawk on Nov 28, 2004 8:49:20 GMT
Perhaps... we could make a poll!
What would the readers find "easier" to read/ understand, what catches the "Comics Feel" better?
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Post by Bengaline on Dec 3, 2004 13:03:44 GMT
Honestly, i like both. Tomahawks sentence sounds more like "live ac tion now" and Silverbacks more like novel.  so whatever it will be ! B. |
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Post by Silverback on Dec 3, 2004 13:22:55 GMT
On the Tribal board the preferred method will be Third Person, Past Tense with all dialogue in Present Tense so that the posts end up reading like a novel.
Other boards may elect to use a different posting method but I'd like to maintain a consistency on the board i.e we stick to the same writing/posting style.
SB
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Post by Tomahawk on Dec 3, 2004 20:00:35 GMT
Then...
So shall it be written, so shall it be done!
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so whatever it will be !